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Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 415]
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* ON THE CHAMBER'S TOP TEN MOST FAVORITE STORIES LIST

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When the lines are drawn, will you risk your life to cross them for love?

In the Summer of 1988, tragedy hits home for Charlene Jacobson and her father when her little brother is killed playing a game of basketball in their Detroit housing projects.  She soon finds herself living in the small rural town of Millersville, Georgia, with her estranged grandmother. Millersville is a place where time stands still and the racial divide is as prevalent as the 1950s.  Secrets, lies, and betrayal lurk in every corner. Yet, through it all she finds solace in the arms of Ryan Quinn, a white senior track star and the son of the town Sherriff.  

Will their love cross the finish line?  

EDIT:  Crossing the Finish line has been removed from this site and a revised version with added new content has been published on Amazon Kindle Vella (as of November 2022) under the penname, Shelly B Williams. To those of you who have left reviews, added me to your Favorite Authors and Story Alerts, and helped to make CTFL one of the Top Ten Most Favorited Stories on Valent Chamber, I trully appreciate all the support you have shown me over the years. I hope you will continue to support me as I begin the next phase of my journey as a published author. I couldn't  have done this without you. 

Much Love!

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: Deep, dark, and mysterious
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 5758
Read Count: 214725
Published: November 07 2010
Updated: January 09 2014


Title: Crossing the Finish Line

LOL Christi!!!!! She's just always popping up like a bad pimple LAWD!

If anything if I was Ryan, I would be pissed just to see her not that she's dating Wes also you know it woould have been helpful for Wes to at least give a bro a heads up like damn... but I would say he should lose his breath over her and exerting more energy getting angry at Christi and Wes... He's got bigger things to focus on.

Thanks for the update!!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: October 27 2013

Title: Crossing the Finish Line

If Charlene listens to Christi and breaks it off with Ryan imma be pissed. Just sayin'. Don't let her get to you girl!

Great chapter!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: March 24 2013

Title: Crossing the Finish Line

I'm happy that they're fighting for this and that Ryan was able to pull Charlie back together. 

Her original decision to break up with him did not surprise me, but I'm glad that it was not followed through to completion

Also yes its realistic and relatable. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next.

Thanks for the update!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: April 17 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 439]
Summary:

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Ellie finds herself living the life that she could only imagine in her dreams. She has graduated from college with a degree in accounting, she is with the man she loves who is just as succesful, if not more than her, and he has just asked her to marry him. What more could a girl ask for? What could go wrong? Everything begins to change once she meets his family and realizes they dont like her. Can this break up their relationship? What is she to do? What about their "family" business? Will their marraige go on? After being on top the only place left to go is down, and Ellie is sure on her way there.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Work in Progress
Series: Mafioso Series
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 50333
Read Count: 89294
Published: May 20 2011
Updated: May 28 2014


Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

I don't even know how Nick and Ellie are going to resolve this problem. Every time I think that they've come close to making up another argument starts. Anyway, I look forward to see how their problems are solved, which ever way you decide to allow that to happen.

Thanks for the update!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 15 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65031
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014


Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

So I don't know what to say exactly. 

But what I do know is that Lila needs to have sometime away from everyone to think about what just happened. She needs to sit and recalculate. This is situtation got out of hand real quick and there is a solution to it. In fact I can see it, but she needs her time to think.

 

Thanks for the update!

 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 10 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 265]
Summary:

Welcome to the city of Baltimore, MD and into the life of Devyn McKnight. Jewelry designer and entrepreneur, Devyn McKnight, thought she was secure in the shell she built around her life, made of family, friends and her jewelry business but an unexpected encounter challenges all that she is and all that she believes she wants to be.  

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content
Series: Journey
Chapters: 32
Completed:Yes
Word count: 91963
Read Count: 104078
Published: December 11 2011
Updated: January 07 2014


Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 26

Oh hell Family take down of Erin and Madeline! I would hate to be them right now....

What Jason said to Devyn was very true and what Christopher said to Jason had some truth to it as well

I'm glad Christopher believed his brother (I was hoping he didn't give a hard time with that) but I also hurt for him... Thouh I'm pretty sure Christopher knows how to handle his own business so I look forward to him doing his own buisness... You go Christopher

 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: September 29 2013

Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 25

Oh lord have mercy look what you did William...well at least that's out there. Let's see where it goes and what happens and how long Devyn is going to be embarrased/hurt for. I'm sure it will work out, but in the mean time William needs to relax after this. I understand he's looking out for his son, but I hope he does not continue to tamper beyond this point or else it's me and William and only one of us is coming out alive LOL

Also I can't wait for when those two conniving mitches are taken down. I can't keep up with their schemes too much man. At some point something has got to give

Thanks for the update!!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: September 02 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 615]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 90701
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014


Title: Chapter 13: Rule #10: No More Games

THIS MOTHER UGH We Called it! We all called her sketchy ass! WTF I can't somebody find Cecila before I do and rip her apart...seriously SERIOUSLY

Then we have Nasty ol Veronia... she's just all sorts of filth. She can't be touched just ew

And then My boy Adam. Dear Adam, my friend get your ass a stiff drink, sit back, and get ready for the shit to hit the fan because boy it's happening mighty fast! Shaun hurry your ass up. This matter is URGENT! Stop fooling around and opening your eyes big like some damn ass deer caught in head lights!! It's go time ACTION tell him GO GO GO F man. People be moving too slow for my liking just dammit spit it out nobody has time to be surprised anymore just go

Love it Voices! Keep it coming! 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: September 27 2013

Title: Chapter 14: 'How to Land a Rockstar in Thirty Days'

Oh first off... I'm still pissed off with Celia. Regardless of her mickey mouse save she sent it anyway. I have not forgiven her as yet and her apology was not alright with me (mostly because I'm still mad at her)

*Aside, mickey mouse thou lol that was clever, but I'm still mad

With that being said, I was mad at Shaun for taking her sweet ass time to tell Adam. As I had said earlier, if she had told him the minute she started to acknowledge her feelings for him then it would have been a different story and this blow out would have happened a lot sooner. So at that point, kudos for Celia for actually getting Shaun to speak up on what she did... girl was taking her sweet ass time NO

Second off- I'm glad Adam did recognize his part in this. With him not wanting to call, typical Adam, so I'm not surprised. If he did call I would have been more shocked so Adam is true to his Adam character lol 

ultimately I guess it was a nice save, she got her credit, Adam maintained his image, but idk the Celia thing is just not flying by me 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: March 12 2014

Title: Chapter 10: “Did you just say pussy?”

GAh this is such a tease I want this to happen so badly already dammit. i get all excited and then... 

I love seeing this relationship develop and then at the same time, seeing Shaun hold back because of her secret, which if she just talked to him about it already feelings would not be as hurt as when her little secret is acutally revealed. The tension IS REAL! I LOVE IT!

Great update! Thanks!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 13 2013

Title: Chapter 11: “I can’t play this game anymore.”

OK OK OK there's a lot here to cover.

1) I know what it is to have a critic for a parent. Constantly pointing out the error and hardly saying what's done right. That's freaking frustrating/ aggravating etc. so definitely get out of there and as much as I want to tell Shaun to face her parentals is easier said than done.

2) We all saw Adam's confession coming (not really a confession he's been blantaly laying it down hard on her (no pun yet lol)). I just feel bad that he's all for it and she wants to be but can't because and 

3) Look this cosmo gig is making things sticky, but to me they're just thinking one track and making it a do it or keep him. There's definitely other options on there...say what if she actually sat down with Adam and have a heart to heart, let him know hey you're going to be pissed. You'll probably not want to talk to me, but I need to tell you what is going on for my sanity and yours, and just spill it all. He might get angry not talk to her for a while, or he might find it humorous (who knows), but if Adam likes her as much as I think he does, he'll come back and they can work something out, I'm sure. They can both get what they want, she needs to communicate to him 

Anyway that's my spew. I've been meaning to write that last bit for the longest, but thanks for the update. Wonder what she will do. Either way Adam is going to be pissed, but whether she publically humiliates him (which will make it worse and I haven't forgotten what he had done in the beginning to set this up, but things are different now... they care for each other) or she tells him what to expect can dim that anger and move things along much faster or just bomb in her face.

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: August 02 2013

Title: Chapter 12: “I knew there was something off about you."

Just talk to him UGHHH just sit your little behind down and talk to the man lord... you'll figure it out just come clean to Adam.

Also I love how he's all into it, but still considers her feelings. Right now there is no question about his feelings for Shaun and I love them together, I just want her to talk to him. Now that she's admitted to wanting him to herself, she's just gotta talk.

Thanks for the update! I'm waiting for more

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: September 11 2013

Title: Chapter 16: “If anything happens to her I swear to god I’ll fucking kill you.”

See no she needs to go do her thing over there in New York. She has the opportunity to do what she loves and leave behind that modeling life that she's not about. I get that she's worried about leaving Adam, but at this point it's Adam that has to face his own demons. There's only so much "I'm Sorry" that Shaun can do. If he can't reconcile his issues then nothing she says will work- clearly as we've just witnessed above. 

GO TO NEW YORK. Handle your business Shaun and live your life. If and when Adam wants to finally get over his problems and talk to you he will, but don't be sitting there waiting on no one. He left you and if he wants to get back with you then that's on him not you. GO TO NEW YORK woman!

Thanks for the update!!! 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 16 2014

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 450]
Summary:

 

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William Lucas Kapori was a self-made millionaire. At 40 he had everything he ever wanted, a beautiful twenty something girlfriend, a luxurious mansion, and a job that he loved. His life was perfect, so why was he pursuing Ana Kay.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 13
Completed:No
Word count: 52745
Read Count: 78022
Published: March 29 2012
Updated: April 10 2014


Title: Chapter 10: {Ten}

Monica is Mad... Federick is Mad... the mother is Mad... just what is up with that family. Thank goodness the dad and vincent are sane otherwsie I would have wrote this whole family off geez! The whole lot of them are mad

Also Will is a beast! DAMN! Edward is not walking again Federick is just going to die WOW... props to Will I'd never get that man upset EVER

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: October 26 2013

Title: Chapter 9: {Nine}

oh geez everyone involved with this Ana scheme is just plain mad and have too much time on their hands... they need a hobby this is one woman people ONE... goodness gracious give her a break. UGH

I want to just grenade them all they're absolutely insane  and playing with a life. I say just blow his brains out now Monica and stop trying to kill other people and Edward needs to be annihilated too because he's just pathetic... That's my solution to this whole thing bam how you like me now LOL

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: October 22 2013

Title: Chapter 11: {Eleven}

" This yelling at me is not working for you. You need to come up with something different." HAHAHAHA this was beautiful!

Elise is annoying 

Monica is annoying. That's the best I can say about her. There are no words 

I want to put her and her cray brother in a house and blow it up. There

Will and Ana are adorbs and I need Nathan and El to get more action hehe

thanks for the update

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: April 01 2014

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Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 257]
Summary:

make it nasty

 

Emery Johnson has been crushing on her older brothers best friend for years, too bad in his eyes, she will only ever be recognized as 'Darrell's sister'. Ready to change that, Emery enlists the help of a single book to snare her dream man, but along the way someone else steps into the picture, shaking up the feelings that Emery thought were tightly secured and forever stable.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 116446
Read Count: 148900
Published: June 08 2012
Updated: September 08 2013


Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

I think you should go with 'A' just to keep moving.

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: December 06 2012

Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

Madea says "Hallelujer"

Thank lawd... she woke up and smelt the coffee damn it Eden. It took your ass so long geez!

At least she realizes it now instead of never. I'm finally happy she's being a mother to both her children. 

Great update. It's about damn time for Eden. 

 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 21 2013

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 332]
Summary:

When recent college grad, Lily Taylor became the personal paralegal to the notorious lawyer of the stars, Aiden Hawkins, she never knew that she would have her hands tied with him...literally.

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 66387
Read Count: 66282
Published: October 03 2012
Updated: July 30 2013


Title: Chapter 10: Right As Rain

That is the cutest little kitten ever 

 

Also great update! The paddling was intense for me and so was the near choking exprience, but I'm in for the ride. I want to see what next he does, well that is after he's gotten Lily to forgive him 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: June 27 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 216]
Summary:

31 year old self-made millionaire Dean DuPont has only one weakness--his wife Charlotte.  There is nothing he wouldn't do for her.

Nothing.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Extreme Language, Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 21048
Read Count: 20106
Published: December 16 2012
Updated: January 02 2013


Title: Chapter 1: One

Oh I am so interested to see where this story is going. Dutifully waiting for the next update. 

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: December 18 2012

Title: Chapter 1: One

All i keep thinking is how this is going to end! I'm so very intrigued to see where this goes. Keep up the good work. I'm in this story till the end. it holds my attention. Can't wait for the update.

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: December 22 2012

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 83]
Summary:

Kwon Jae Hwa had been prepared to succeed. He had worked hard for everything he had earned all of his life, and that resulted in getting him to great places in life.

One day, his life is interrupted by a vibrant, young, aspiring dancer. She's carefree, and the complete opposite of what he is used to, but something tells him that she is exactly what he wants.

He has no reason to doubt that she feels the same about him, until she is offered the opportunity of a lifetime that puts a halt on everything they have, and Jae Hwa is left with a great responsibility to handle on his own.

Jae Hwa must face the one hardship he never thought he would have to go through with his first love.

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Graphic Violence, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:No
Word count: 28452
Read Count: 69795
Published: February 14 2013
Updated: June 12 2013


Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

Her mother is one triflin piece of GAh I can't even with this family right now! I just wanna deck her in her throat damn she pisses me off and I'm sorry but Marcus had that coming for his a** I mean seriously. No take backs boy needed to hear it anyway. Though, pause, he did have good reason behind her not running off without a back up plan. I'm all for back up plans but this diabolical mischief her parents are up to is just not my cup of tea no ma'am. Great chapter! Clearly got a rise out of me. I've been holding it in for too long for that woman

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: April 29 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 417]
Summary:

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Benjamin Cunningham III decided to finally open the box that his adopted parents had given him which would reveal his past.  Little did he know that its contents would change his life forever.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Rape
Challenges: Through His Eyes
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:No
Word count: 82948
Read Count: 53960
Published: May 15 2013
Updated: September 05 2014


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Deception and Lies

First- there are some cold nasty bastards out there 

Second- I'm very proud that Teddy is not hiding who he is. His mother and father, mostly his mother, raised him very well! I love that he's taking charge of this and being very openminded towards Ophelia and even Margie. The part when he called her grandma was very strong and powerful

Third- I'm happy that his mom is on board to get Raymond back because his nastiness needs to be stopped! He's scum and it needs to be cleaned and scrubbed with some heavy chemicals 

Great update thanks! I await more to see how it all plays out! 

 



Author's Response:

Yes, Abigail is on board because she knows how manipulative her brother really is.  She knows what he holds dear besides his money and she's going after it with a vengence.  More is coming!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 19 2013

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 The Sour Taste of Revenge

Hell Yeh Bennie you tell Kevin hell that girl is NA-STY! 

Also Ophelia got herself in a big wormhole. Good luck getting out hunny. I'm with Bennie on this one. I feel just as betrayed as he does and mostly because of all the lying and her ridiculous revenge plan. Knew that was going to backfire one way or the other...smh

Thanks for the update!

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: June 04 2013

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Learning and Coping

DEEP! This story is pulling strings I love how raw it is! 

Beautiful

Thank you for this

Reviewer: thincakes Signed
Date: May 19 2013

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