Taught to see the worst in people so he lived life semi- emotionless, that is until he met her.
You should reconsider not re-editing your work. I read as far as 3/4 of the way through the first chapter before I stopped. There is at least 1 simple gramatical error in every paragraph. Simple things like plurals and past or present tense. It it difficult to read when I have to mentally correct your word choices just for the story to make sense.
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In the wake of an ugly divorce, Natalia executes a scheme meant to move her beyond the hurt inflicted by her ex-husband, Richard. The plan is to ease her suffering by increasing his, and her weapon, a younger man unwittingly drawn into the illicit plot.
In the quest for revenge, will Natalia realize her goal of bringing Richard to his knees? Or will vengeance and her weapon of choice become her undoing?
With familylike that who needs enemies!
Exactly. Thanks Dinndee!
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Summary: Modern Love Story
Zane was just hitting his stride in the modeling world. He had good friends and family and he enjoyed being able to support himself. However he didn't have one inkling of how hard it was to maintain happiness and good fortune in a world of sycophants and envious frenemies until that fateful night. Yet on that same night he discovered that there were still good people in the world, one person in particular in whom he may have found paradise. Although both of them have their struggles they will soon discover through passion and turmoil how to make love thrive in a modern world.
Paragraphs with spaces would make this much easier to read. Formatting is an important part of editing.
I am well aware of that. Sorry for the difficulty in reading. I have attempted to reformat it properly.
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submissive: adjective
1. inclined or ready to submit or yield to the authority of another;unresistingly or humbly obedient: submissive servants.
2. marked by or indicating submission or an instance of yielding to the authority of another
Even for bondage the idea of a man drinking out of a dog bowl is just too much.
Thanks for reading! Being treated like an animal, specifically dogs, cats or horses, is actually a huge area of the BDSM lifestyle. It's not all about being chained, gagged, whipped or tied up. We usually don't get to see a formidible female Domme, who is rough and get's exactly what she wants. It's usually the other way around. It's just an area I wanted to explore :).
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed He made a promise to protect her. Can he keep it? Can he keep her?
Im hooked. Can't wait to see what happens next. How she got the scars, who is after her. So many great questions.
Thanks for reviewing, I hope to keep you asking questions as the story evolves.
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Chance Gyllenborgh seems to have it all. A pregnant, loving girlfriend, a close knit family, and great life.
Angelina Walker is running. She's a top chef and restaurantuer and a workaholic. She throws herself into work to avoid her personal life. Needing a break, she settles down in a town and meet a variety of different people, including Chance.
Things seem great at first glance but Below The Surface is where monsters lie and sociopaths dwell.
I've been enjoying the story right up until the scene with Angelina and Chad outside the doorway. I'm not sure if I liked it. It seemed a little odd, out of place even. I'll keep reading and see where you take it.
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed Sequel to "Love, God & Ultimatums"
Im not sure even at this stage that I understand the relationship with Diya and her family and Brandon and his family. Why the conflict is so deep and disturbing. Why his brother is so awful. Interesting chapter, but it leaves me wanting some clarity.
Diya's family is meddlesome and her parents are willing to employ underhanded means to control who she dates. It was little more than annoyance in the past because she's never lost anyone worth having to their foolishness. Brandon does not fall into the category of expendable, yet she fully expects Will and Dev to interfere with the relationship as only they can. As for Brandon, the issues between him and his family have been hinted toward, and will be fully discussed in upcoming chapters.
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed What kind of enimies does Marisol have and if you have those kinds of enemies why is she walking the streets alone???? My goodness. Great chapter. The last chapter was hilarious though.
Marisol has at least one enemy, but these aren't hers. More on that next chapter. Thanks Dinndee!
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed It seems Marisol has more of an agenda than is obvious. She didn't tell Brandon about the phone call. That was deliberate.
You just might be right. Thanks Dinndee.
Reviewer: Dinndee SignedStrong woman.
I've always considered myself to be one, but there's always been something about him thats made me weak.
Maybe it's just me but the pics are not showing.
So sorry! Just realized that the pics aren't showing up, I dont know why, but hopefully it will be fixed by next chapter :)
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"We all exist to a certain degree Nathan."
That was so interesting. I'll check out your other POI fanfic at the other site. Thanks for sharing here.
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed Contiued Series!!!!When there is a sound that sounds like your own reflection, can it be you? Or can it be a sound from your past thats dried within your walls? Follow this Erotic Mystery the details will leave you craving for more words!
This is not very well written. I don't think I could get past all the grammatical errors to try to get into the story. Also, the blurb is trying way to hard. Sometimes less is more.
that's cool! A writer always stays ...encouraged😜 thanks for stoooooping byyyyy tho😘
Reviewer: Dinndee SignedFriendship and love cross paths. Deacon is VP of the Warrior Crusaders wondering about what the future holds. Lonilla is drifting through life. The two slide into a friendship that is more than the connection they feel toward one another. Will he fulfill is promise? Can Lonilla value the meaning of love? ADDED PROLOGUE
The first few chapters were really interesting, but the last 3 or so chapters were difficult to understand. The formating makes it difficult to read. I have to try to work out who is saying what, what is supposed to be internal dialogue and what is actual conversation. I would suggest a formatting change to make your story easier to read.
Hi Dinndee,
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. The chapters have been revised. Please do share your thoughts. Hopefully the story will remain interesting for you *winks*.
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.