Response to the Made to Order challenge!
So this is a horse if a completely different color.
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedI enjoy how your mind works. Can't wait for the update!
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"What had she gotten herself into?"
My thoughts exactly, seems our heroine didn't read the fine print. Loving this!
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Freedom and neutrality was something Victory Red always desired.
However when your born in the middle of a war you can see how that could be difficult.
Luckily Victoria wasn't one to give up.
TThanks for the update!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedEzekiel's parents took extreme measures to keep him hidden from his controling racist grandfather. Ezekiel was adopted and raised by Rosa a black woman and his life is now about to take a drastic change.
When will that old man learn to leave well enough alone,lol? Thanks for the update!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedYou can pick your friends. You can pick your nose. But you can't pick your family.
Another good chapter. Matt's "Marsha, Marsha, Marsha!" moment was hilarious and it felt spot on... everyone gets along with Shyla except for him, lol. Their bickering and antagonizing each other feels almost like sibling rivalry, so the moments where one of them notices something attractive about the other helps me to remember this will eventually lead to romance.
Lauren should have slapped him after that "hormonal woman" comment. What a jackass!
She did eventually slap him.
Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedI love Shyla. The Drake/ Suge Night scale was hilarious (and so on point). Thanks for the update!
Haha! It's so real though!
Reviewer: Fantasque Signed"If you haven't judged my mother yet, you should." I love Shyla so much!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedNicole Beharie is exactly who I have been picturing as Shyla.
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedIs it wrong that I am looking forward to the confrontation between Shyla and Matt? He's going to be knocked for six by her reasons for meeting the jeweller... Have I mentioned that I love Shyla?!
Thanks for the update!
Not wrong at all
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedI have a feeling Matt is going to get his pride trampled (and probably work my last nerve) with this need for Shyla to see him as a man and not a buddy, lol.
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedThis was fantastic.
Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedHave I mentioned how much I love Shyla? Between "peak uppity negro" and her entire speech at the end... gosh, I needed that laugh. She is wrong about him hating her but he is being an ass and so childish that he deserved her going full stop mob meeting on him.
Thanks for the update!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedAppearances can be deceiving
I think everyone else will cover Gabriel's high-handed, entitled, elitist, kinda racist, jackassery (he's a bit like the guy in Visceral...maybe that is a personal preference, so what would there be for me to critique?) and I'll focus on Adele. You didn't really let us get to know her. Max thinks the world of her, Gabriel's come to really like her. Great. But all we know if her is 18 months ago she was pudgy and dumpy, now she's thin(er?) and well dressed. Oh, and she comes from a humble/ poor background. I got why she disliked him but why does anyone like her ( besides the fact that she is hot now)?
I like your writing style and this has the bones of a great story but 9 chapters in I would have liked to feel more than indifference (Adele) and annoyance/ distaste (Gabriel).
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedChoi Ha-Nui is a former olympic swimmer who finds herself back home coaching the men's swimming team of a prestigious high school. She finds herself entangled in the lives of two brothers, as she tries to navigate the world as a new retiree.
That (the first father son chat) was deep. And the eighties flashback was everything, lol.
Thanks for enjoying it!
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I just want to hug Sung Min... like, this child can't seem to catch a break when it comes to trifling people. Is it wrong that I loved the shade throwing co workers almost as much as I did Kibum and Ha-Nui's first meeting?!
Reviewer: Fantasque SignedDisclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.
