Penname: jacqua43 [Contact]

Real name: jacqueline

Member Since: March 25 2013

Membership status: Member

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I'm just a woman who loves her God, her husband, her 6 children, her grandbaby, her son-in-law, her family, herself, her peace, her job, her Pittsburgh Steelers and to read all in a nutshell. I LOVE LIFE!!!



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Thoroughly revised and reuploaded!

 

Willow Carter is a plus-sized girl with lots of attitude and very low self-esteem. When her mother and oler sister force her to jog to slim down for her sister's wedding, she is attacked by a madman and rescued by a savior. But just because a man saves your life doesn't mean you should trust him. Soon she throws herself into a thrilling game of cat and mouse that brings more pain than pleasure and puts everyone she loves in harm's way.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Mystery, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Graphic Violence, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 90171
Read Count: 302340
Published: October 04 2015
Updated: April 17 2021


Title: Chapter 22: Lost Children

Sebastian and Willow are two lost souls but they can find themselves together not apart. When she told him " We're going to be okay " that was giving him HOPE. MJ, Honey try not to stress over that peace stealer. God moves mountains he can move teachers to. Thanks honey for this update.

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Date: July 09 2017

Title: Chapter 23: Tiny Punishments

Wow! this chapter was intense... I loved the flashback. Sebastian is a torture soul. His childhood was horrible with his mother, no wonder he was so acceptable to Juliette and her mind games. He has to be deprogrammed from this cult... because that's what that organization is a diabolical cult. I hope Willow can help save him from himself. MJ, now I get the title to this story. I was thinking Willow was the one trying to be saved but Sebastian is the one that needs saving. Great chapter honey! and thank you for it.

Author's Response:

Your feedback and encouragement means a lot, thank you, Mrs. Jacqua. I am glad you noticed why Sebastian is so desensitized to Juliette's mind games. Why he lets her do it. It all goes back to his childhood. I really like the comparsion you made between the company and a cult. It is very much like a cult. I am so happy you understand the title now! In the beginning, Willow did need to be saved physically and mentally. She was attacked by a madman and she suffered from low self-esteem. Sebastian exposed her to the fact that she was beautiful and very much wanted. But the title has always pointed to Sebastian needing to be saved from himself. :) 

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Date: July 13 2017

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 13]
Summary:

This is a brief story about revenge. The prey and the victim's names are not included.



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Categories: Miscellaneous
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 471
Read Count: 4848
Published: October 05 2015
Updated: October 05 2015


Title: Chapter 1: The Captive

DAMN!!!! well if he can dish it , he can take it. GO GIRL!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Hello, I posted this scene because I wanted to see if readers would be interested in this story. If so, I planned to write the entire story after I've completed the one I'm currently invested in. I was surprised by all the great responses, and I thank each and every one of you for enjoying the scene. I shall return with a more fleshed out story, from beginning to end, in the future. Thank you again. ~ Virginia Gilbert

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Date: October 06 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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Summary:

Zuma is a high level marketing executive. Intelligent, ambitious, and manipulative, she's powered her way up the corporate ladder and into a cozy corner office. Being the only black woman at her level at Shearing Wireless has its drawbacks, and Zuma's had to get her hands a little dirty to stay at the top. Suddenly, all of her hard work might now be in jeopardy, thanks to a company merger and a pesky intern named Iris Pena. Iris is just trying to satisfy her internship requirement - or at least that's what she keeps telling herself. Beautiful, young, and vivacious, Iris manages to charm Shearing Wireless in ways that the stunning, yet cold, Zuma Harris could never hope. Juggling corporate espionage, a blooming love life, and issues with her increasingly handsome best friend are becoming more than she can handle. Does Iris have what it takes to go toe-to-toe with her conniving mentor? And will she be able to do it without breaking a few hearts on the way?



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 19456
Read Count: 6349
Published: October 11 2015
Updated: January 12 2016


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Zuma is so feeling herself.

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Date: November 02 2015

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow!! do Zuma makes everyone in the office hate to come to work. I mean Betty is acting like someone stole her joy (oh I forgot Zuma did). Zuma just sized Iris up that fast, old jealous bitch!! hating for no reason, there will always be someone prettier then you or more talented then you, but you don't hate them you celebrate them. I like the fact that Iris has the inside scoop on the merger and Zuma was looking like (boo boo the fool), Zuma done showed her hand and now it's time for iris to play the trump card. That's why you should always treat people with respect and kindness, because you never know who someone is, who they know or in this case (what they know). Zuma makes me want to punch her in the throat!!! Thanks for the update.

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Date: October 19 2015

Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I just absolutely hate women like Zuma, I'm with Bellachica I to have meet a few Zuma's in my life. I work in a hospital and I know everyone's name plus I talk to everyone that's just me. I don't care the positions they hold, we are all human, there is no one better than the other. The people I work with knows I'm one of the ones you do not come to talking about anyone, because I shut that noise down. I wish someone would call their self telling me who I can talk to OH HELL NO!!, they normally see another side of me and they never go there again. I'm with Iris every step of the way, let the witch keep talking she just don't realize she's digging her own grave. Zuma trying to belittle Iris is real petty and childish and a rookie move on Zuma's part, that chick make me want to catch a case for kicking that *ss. I have a group of women about 20 of them in my " Sister Circle" there are black women, white women, latin women, asian women, basically all nationality of women. We meet at my house every wednesday and watch t.v., listen to music, we help with school, childcare, bill's, relationship situations and emotional therapy. We build women up, we don't tear them down, we don't see color all we see is a Sisterhood of strong women from all walks of life. This chapter has got me hot!!. Thanks for the update.

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Date: October 25 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Zuma is a straight up BITCH!!!! you don't have to treat people badly to get your come-up. Malcomb was just mad because the tables were turned on him, they can dish it, but they can't take it. All those people Zuma hurt on her way going up, will be the same people she will see on her way going down. I like this story.



Author's Response:

Jacqua, you know my characters already! I love and appreciate your review. I can't wait to hear what you think about happens next...

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Date: October 13 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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Summary:

 Denise is marrying the man of her dreams. She is determined to be a perfect wife, mother, and homemaker. Even if she has to get her apron a little dirty along the way. 

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Psychological
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 2088
Read Count: 1547
Published: October 12 2015
Updated: October 15 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Daddy will fall

DAMN!!! Denise is hardcore, I like this.

Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 13 2015

Title: Chapter 2: Why couldn't you see?

Denise girl!! you are doing to much, that man is not going to care about what you look like in the morning as long as you are giving him that good loving to make his day feel special. Ms. Denise is cray!cray! I got a feeling pussy whip Blake is the flunky on the phone. Why do I think that crazy Denise is having somebody in Brady's life eliminated. I hope Brady is not the man across the street. Thanks for the update!

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Date: October 15 2015

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Summary:

Sometimes hurting the person you love is easier than showing them love, especially when you're hurting inside.

Saint-Luc and Naomi Adebayo-Roux aren't any different.

This is their story.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Friendship, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 46514
Read Count: 376396
Published: October 14 2015
Updated: July 15 2017


Title: Chapter 13: 13.

Now it's time for this relationship to get real, seeing the man you love lifeless body is to much!! I see a turning point now. Thanks for the update, how are you?



Author's Response:

A dose of optimism always does in dark times as it is with these two. I'm good thank you and hope you are very well too :-).

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Date: February 19 2016

Title: Chapter 16: 16.

I'm happy that Naomi is coming into her own sense of purpose, trying to pave her own way and helping children discover their way too. She's growing as a person and realizing that she can't do it alone. I hope Naomi and Saint come together real soon and go on this journey together. I'm happy to hear from you honey, I hope everything is going well. Thanks for this update.



Author's Response:

About time for her, it really hasn't been a smooth journey - but it's life.

I'm happy to hear from you too. I'm okay, and I hope you are well too :-)

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Date: April 15 2016

Title: Chapter 5: 5.

I wonder how Naomi is going to hide the fact that she is married from her family and friends, because what's done in the night always comes to the light. To Naomi her marriage feels more like a business merger instead of a loving relationship and Saints demanding personality is not helping the situation. You had me cracking up when she farted in his face, that was hilarious and Saint-Luc handle it like a true mature grown man. I'm worried about his blood sugar. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Lol, it was pretty hilarious for me too writing that part about the farting. But believe me when I say, there is a LOT that is needed to be worked out by them.

As ever, thank you so much for reading :-).

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Date: November 02 2015

Title: Chapter 2: 2.

Why? are they in a strip club for women, where are the men. I wouldn't want to see fish flopping around, I want sausages bouncing up and down. Saint-Luc is very blunt and honest and I find that refreshing in a person, someone who is always going to tell you the truth vs someone who will tell you a lie to make you feel better. I find that man HOTT!!!. Thanks for the update.

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Date: October 20 2015

Title: Chapter 19: 18.2

Yes!! I love this update, I can't wait to see what happens next for these two. How are you honey?

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and I'm okay, I hope you are too :-).

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Date: September 06 2016

Title: Chapter 3: 3.

Mr. Saint-Luc has a little insecurity about his age. He's so honest with other people but not himself, he's worrying about how Naomi will reject him because of his age. Ms. Naomi is worrying about the same thing but opposite, she's thinking he will only see her as just a sexual companion instead of a worthy women. They both are wrong, they are looking for each other and they don't even know it yet. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Well there's a reason they say, ''opposites attracts''.

By the way, I completely thought I'd replied to your comment on Ch.2 but I must have forgot which is odd since I found it so amusing to read.

Thank you so much for reading and your support, it means a lot :-).

Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 22 2015

Title: Chapter 4: 4.

I love this story!!! all they had to do is talk to each other and tell the other what they want, need and like. That is why my marriage has lasted so long. He gives me what I need and in return I give him what he needs, we talk everyday for hours, we loved each other. The fact that she didn't allow his sickness to turn her away was very mature of her, and rather she knows it or not that was a move of a women who loves a man. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Hm, I may be coming to you soon for relationship advice lol. But yes an understanding from each other is what is important to make a relationship work. You'll get tired of me saying this but thank you so much again for reading :-).

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Date: October 29 2015

Title: Chapter 1: 1.

I would have put a little "Shug Avery pee in his drink"LOL!.



Author's Response:

No lie lol, that's actually a good idea. Thanks for reading :-).

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Date: October 15 2015

Title: Chapter 6: 6.

I'm wondering how they would make the living arrangement work, but if there's a will there's a way. I also like the fact that Saint didn't lose his cool when she told him she was not going to see him, he handle it just like a grown man would. There is always a big differents between how a man would handle something vs a little boy. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

I totally agree with you, considering Saint is 45, it is expected of him but obviously that's not always the case.

 

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Date: November 10 2015

Title: Chapter 7: 7.

Saint-Luc and Naomi needs to make a decision on where they are going to live, they are more apart then together, her home is where he is and his home is where she is. Having a long distance relationship is hard, being married it makes it even harder. Their communication skills SUCKS!. When she told him she wanted to stay with her family for the holidays that ticked me off because he is her family now. Why? Is she not wearing her wedding ring, I go no where without mines, that's a symbol of their love and devotion to each other. Naomi needs to open her eyes and recognize a good man before another woman does. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Oooh, I think there's a feisty marriage counsellor in you, nothing you said was a lie, we'll just have to see what happens :-)

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Date: November 30 2015

Title: Chapter 8: 8.

Naomi was wrong!! she came at that man like he was a stranger on the street. All he did was asked her about her dreams and she went all high mighty on him. This man told you he didn't believe in marriage but he married you because that was what you wanted., he wanted you that much and you needed him that much. I know she is only 19 but a 9 year old knows what's appropriate to say to someone, and she's a runner everytimes something goes wrong she runs away, Naomi girl you need to grow up! you are playing a grow up game now!!. She said that he only married her for sex, this man can get sex from anywhere and he did! and I don't blame him at all. Naomi fed this monster now she has to live with it. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

You know these two to their bone lol, I always look forward to your comments. Thanks for reading :-)

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Date: December 07 2015

Title: Chapter 9: 9.

Saint-Luc has a heart and a conscious too, he knows what he did was wrong and hopefully he will own-up to it, but the man is human he has feelings just like she has feelings. Naomi is no saint either ( what she did was like telling a dog to bite someone and when they do you punish that dog) you don't tell your husband to go seek " sexual gratification" with other females and if they do, you get what you get. Right now they are in a unhealthy relationship. To me there are 7 key ingredients to a healthy relationship (1) Friendship ( they never had the chance to be real friends first), (2) Freedom ( they need to stop trying to control each other), (3) Honesty ( they need to tell each other truthfully how they really feel about their marriage and each other),(4) Trust ( this one has pretty much went out the window, but they can build it back if they are willing) they have to show each other that they can rely on each other and have confident that they are safe physically and emotionally., (5) Understanding( they need to know why? Saint drinks to hide his emotional state, why? Naomi runs away so she wont have to deal with conflict), (6) Communication ( they don't know how to talk to each other, and neither one listens), (7) A Healthy Sex Life ( I think they pretty much got this one ( on lock) as my kids would say. Naomi the man just said that he's in love with you and you are acting the fool, Woman Up already!!!. I think Naomi is pregnant, with all them mood swings, cravings and tears. Thanks for the update.

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Date: December 14 2015

Title: Chapter 10: 10.

I'm happy they decided where they are going to live as a couple.  I don't agree with her giving up her education, she could try and transfer. She should not have to compromise her dreams in order to be in a marriage, a husband supports his wife dreams and do everything in his power to make it come true. Naomi needs to know that her education and dreams are hers and no one else's, was she pregnant? If so what happen to the baby?. Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

I think what you wrote in your last comment about the 7 ingredients for a successful marriage was sooo true, and a lot of the ingredients these two are missing. They have a long way to go....

thank you ever so much for reading :-)

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Date: December 21 2015

Title: Chapter 11: 11.

How is Naomi going to love someone when she don't even love herself.The self-harm she's doing to herself is a cry for help and Saint Luc is only looking on the surface. But how can he see her pain if he's in pain too. They both don't know their own worth. Saint wasn't thinking when he brought his sister-in-law and her children into the house. He should have told Naomi, where he was going and who he was going to be with, because she don't trust him anymore. I think they both are dealing with depression and they both need help. I'm glad you are back, I missed you. Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

You're on to something Jacqua (as always). I missed you more! Thanks so much for reading :-).

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Date: January 17 2016

Title: Chapter 14: 14.

I'm glad Saint-Luc is okay. Still drinking! consequences Saint-Luc consequences. I like her spending time with her friends everyone needs a outlet, every relationship needs some me time( alone). He's trying to be honest and communicate but she's still not ready to fight for herself. What a person allow is what will be. She could've said hell no! you are not going to no strip club and be done with it, but no she ran again. Something has to give very soon. Thanks for the update, and I would be checking out your blog. I hope you are doing well my friend.



Author's Response:

I am doing well, thank you for asking, I hope you are well too. :-). And you're right time alone is needed in a relationship so time spent together is valued.

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Date: March 06 2016

Title: Chapter 15: 15.

I think that's the right decision for them right now. I love the fact that they are starting to open up to each other. We will see how much they care for each other when they are apart " Absence make the heart grows fonder " or does It makes you forget?. How are you friend? Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Yes, hopefully they do see how much they care for each other. I hope you are well too (lol i feel like you're more of my virtual aunt/ relationship counsellor)  :-)

Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 15 2016

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