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I would love to see Henry's POV...................

 Reviewer: Silveronyx73 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 09:04 am
Title: QUESTION

I say keep it as a side story I feel that it would take way from Val in all about her and I'm not trying to hear Henry's pov at the moment,period I feel that he's a selfish he wants Val only when it's Convenient for him,I know he has love for her put dude his just laying with her feelings,I'd love to hear his side but not in unguarded .But like you said it's your story ill love it either way but please let Val burn his ass,every good story doesn't always have to have a happy ending :)

 Reviewer: toni174ever Signed starhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 08:51 am
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i dont think it would ruin the story because it would be great to know why he does what he does. it would enrich the plot.

 Reviewer: vanessa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 08:33 am
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Nope I think that providing his POV. Would give us more insight into what he's thinking . Love this story ! 

 Reviewer: RedMoon Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 06:45 am
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I would actually love a chapter in Henry's POV. I've always wondered how he felt about Valery. From his eyes not hers.

 Reviewer: PearlsofWisdom Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 06:33 am
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While I would love a Henry POV, this story has been told from Val's viewpoint that I think it should stay that way for this story.  What makes it so intriguing is that we don't know what the hell is going on in Henry's mind most of the time.  Although you haven't wrote specifically from his side of the street, we gain more understanding when he opens up to Val and we see her growth as well in those moments.  He is like a Xmas gift that is already wrapped so prettily under the tree that you are anxious to find out what the gift is but don't want to destroy the wrapping so you take your time, is careful, delicate when you finally have the opportunity to open it, if that make any sense.  I can see his thoughts as a reflection at the end after hopefully a HEA *wink, wink* of what he went thru with his courtship of Val.  Hope this helps.  I am sure I will love whichever direction you go in.

 Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 06:25 am
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Henry pov can flow if u talk about the day he left a the past 4 since she's seen him :)

 Reviewer: mrmalone Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 05:57 am
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I personally do enjoy understanding what the characters are thinking/feeling from both the female and male POV's ( as long as it doesn't give up too much before you want it to).  If it gives up too much, then maybe a separate short story afterward would be better to ensure you don't interrupt the flow. I like the pace of the build up of the story, and your attention to detail.  Thanks!

 Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 05:32 am
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Hmmm I think not knowing his POV keeps us wondering and more realistic to a females thought process especially when you have a guy like Henry. I think doing another story in his POV would be a better option. Because IMO I like that I don't know what's going on in his head. I would certainly like to figure out! Lol just not in the middle of the story I think it would ruin the overall emotional attachment that I have to this story lol!

 Reviewer: Justkillingtime21691 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 05:22 am
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Not at all!  It would be nice to get further insight into Henry's thought process.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 05:09 am
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Not at all!! I would like to read his POV. I would like to know his reasons for doing what he does to her. I mean of course he probably thinks he's like his dad in some way. I would like to read his side :-)

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 04:50 am
Title: QUESTION

Please do Henry's pov!!! That would be amazing!

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 04:33 am
Title: QUESTION

Personally, I think one chapter from HPOV would be great. At the conclusion of the story, perhaps the epilogue. Maybe as a secondary continuantion. I see Unguarded as Valerie's journey. Selfishly I want to get into his head but at the same time, this is about her. I feel Henry deserves more than a single chapter because he has so much depth. There is so much to explore. I appreciate you reaching out to your audience for input. It shows a desire to really develop your craft. This is just my opinion 

 Reviewer: PaperRoses Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 04:26 am
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IMO it is up to you. I have loved reading this story and trying to figure out what you will write next.  I will read whatever you bring. 

 Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 04:16 am
Title: QUESTION

Henry is a wonderful diseaster if I ever seen one. He's too emotinally wrecked for Valerie or any woman for that matter. She doesn't deserve the dissapearing act or the constant apologies. We're all scared of something so him being scared of how he feels for her is no excuse. Like seriously he knows she's really fragile. I myself would love to read henrys pov. I think it'll help us really grasp why he runs everytime it gets too deep. I just hope valerie gets stronger and not weaker. She's gotta start depending on herself for hapiness. I have faith in her though so I think she'll work it out.

 Reviewer: aDreamaFantasy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 04:01 am
Title: Prologue

I changed my mind about a chapter with Henry's POV.  If it's going to change  the flow of the story then continue as it is.  You've given a lot of insight as the story has developed. The homeless issue, his ex fiance cheating on him, his father being a drifter, his fear of being broke,  his wariness of the people that latch onto to them because of his brother's fame, his detaching hismself  from everyone when he works, all of these things about him has been revealed throughout the story.  So we are not completely in the dark about him.  We even know he loves Val, so its up to you.

 Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 03:57 am
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I wouldn't mind reading Henry's POV but I think you should make it a side story. I just think it will ruin the flow of the story. 

 Reviewer: lovelywhitt Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 03:23 am
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I would love to read Henry's POV. You can title the chapter extra or bonus or something like that and include in chapter notes basically what you have said: one time only, not intended to move plot forward, etc.

 Reviewer: dydrmr Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 03:20 am
Title: QUESTION

I think it's a good idea to get his POV. It would help me understand his Flip flopping. 

 Reviewer: Apple Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 03:16 am
Title: QUESTION

I would like to see what's going on in Henry's mind

 Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:45 am
Title: QUESTION

 

 

I personally like to read the other persons point of view,  I think it shows how differently people see the same situation.

on another note, you are an excellent writer. to be honest at first I wasn't to sure if I liked this story maybe because I didn't like how she always put herself down or maybe how he acted was too real and close to someone I know, maybe it made me feel uncomfortable.  Now I'm addicted to find out what happens between the two of them. urghhhhhh

 

It is like watching Being Mary Jane, hate how she is letting herself be treated but I'm addicted to watching it happen and understand why she's doing it.Okay next chapter please :-)

 

 

 

 Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:21 am
Title: QUESTION

I agree with 1nadali

I dont' think a Henry POV is needed and it might very well affect the flow. I kinda like guessing what he's thinking. Although, some of it comes through in the way that he responds to her. But at the end of the day, this is your story andyour muse, go with what your gut says.

 Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:18 am
Title: QUESTION

Don't change a thing.  Henry's pov would be nice but is not necessary.  If you're readers want to know where story is heading they should read first chapter because you started with the ending. 

 Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:07 am
Title: QUESTION

One chapter of his POV would definitely clear things up.

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:04 am
Title: QUESTION

I think a chapter in Henry's voice would be nice. It would be interesting to see where he is coming from when it comes to his life and his feelings about Val.  If you chose to do this it is your decision but it would be welcome from this reader. And also this is a great story. Every time I see an update it just gets better and better.

 Reviewer: bella200183 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 02:01 am


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