And also, "What the hell, Slade!"  Ugh, I hope you have to pine for Dina and then crawl back to her!

I think this story is really interesting and exiciting.  I'm a sucker for alpha males, especially when it comes to accidental matings.  You wrote some great love scenes!

That said, this story would benefit from editing.  It would me much easier to read.  There was dialogue that wasn't very easy to discern because of ill-placed puntuation and missing words. 

Wow, the editing here has made this fun story one hundred times better!  I liked that you left out the chat with Nora.  I felt like it gave Alex and Ari a little time to settle which is what a real couple would do after experiencing an exceptional or traumatic event together. 

Oh, man, that was the best one yet!  Keep 'em comin'!

"...own a female..."  That's pretty horrible.  These Zulraian teammates of Mindy's are pretty awful.  And what the fuck, Earth government?  Are you guys in on this shit?  This is basically kidnapping at this point.  I hope Mindy can get back to Earth; I doubt she'll get there.  They've got plans for her and her drinking problem is boring and bound to get her into trouble.  Those girls are trapped! 

I wish there was a segment detailing Mindy's experience.  It sounds really interesting.  I would have loved to get descriptions of the lower castes of Zulraians societies.  Is it more like crowded open air markets in India or endless, winding streets of three story shops like Galway City?  

I can't wait for Omid to save Summer from a sticky situation!  At least she has Ricardo there as some kind of back up until she wises up to Omid's crush.  If Omid is super old will she even be able to enjoy a 'Happily Ever After' with him before she dies and he's only middle aged?!!?  I guess the Zulraians can make human females health and fertile - who says they can't tack a few years onto their lives?

Ah!  I can hardly wait for more! 

Whoa, that threesome could have happened a little more gradually, but no worries; the story is pretty hot!  The bed scene was surprisingly tasteful and touching.  It's great that intimacy is being established (even though Sallie's only been in the McRyan's home for a day) before they all get down and dirty.

How long are they all going to hide out in the woods?  That would make for plenty of awkward run-ins and accidental "slap, slap, kisses."  I can't wait!  Aside from several grammatical errors, this is still an enjoyable read for me. 

What do I think?  I think this is a really fun story!   I would like to get more of a feel for the heroine, but, on the other hand, the story is entitled "The McRyan Brothers."  The focus is more on them than Sallie.  

Also, I'd like to know how remoteness of their location.  In the first chapter, Casey tells Sallie he hasn't seen a woman in five years.  Obviously, since the brothers are able-bodied and mobile this separation from normal society is somewhat voluntary.  Or is it?

Are they out there on their own in the remote woods because they're on the run?  Are they landowning billionaires trying to shed societal pressure and have a normal life?  Are they werewolves?  It's obvious Sallie was that far out in the wilderness with her family because they wanted to murder her in a hard to find place. 

Will she be stuck with the brothers because of inclimate weather?  Will they convince her that the safest place to be is in their strong arms..?  Hot.  I can't wait to find out all this stuff!  

Also, I didn't have a problem with Sallie being calm and collected and relating to her supposed captor with her sister anecdote.  I just assumed she was being clever and cunning, trying to soften Casey up.  That way, she'd gain his trust and escape as soon as she had a chance.  

I mean, think about it; that plan kind of worked.  After making nice with her, Casey goes upstairs to plead Sallie's case to Hayes, the paranoid and domineering older brother.  It's doubtful Casey would have done that if Sallie had been freaking out uncontrollably.  It's called manipulation, people.  Come on!  If Sallie wants to get out of there - which she still would at this point - she's going to have to use every trick up her sleeve. 

Yikes!  Anne is such a creep!  The Breggins should consider a restraining order...

Oh, Alfred, you little fool.  

At first, I thought the Anne Fleming rape scene was over the top, but the aftermath was so jarring!  Thomas' shame was visceral.  My heart broke for him a little.  That woman is crazy rapist trash and she needs to go down. 

Wow, Anne is super creepy.  She's basically stalking Selena. For a government regulated agency, Antex sure doesn't care about people's right to privacy.  They're worse than the NSA.  Selena should get her senator to create some legislation protecting her rights; but then again, they might shut down Alfred as retaliation!  

I'd love to see someone who lost the android they loved to a shut down.  Or an android whose owner died; what happens to those models?  There are so many possibilities!  You've created an awesome sci-fi world here! 

AHHHHHHH!  OMG, that was not enough.  I was like, "Oh, not another chapter 'til next week.  No big deal.  I can hang that long."  And then...BAM!  SUSPENSE!  THRILLS.  I'm dying.  Is Anne going to use her knowledge of Thomas' secrets against him when she gets caught?  If she gets caught!  Bah!

Wow, that was so great!  The awkwardness of that love scene could not have been any more real.  Here I was, expecting some steamy threesome.  Instead, I got hit with a nice dose of reality.  Alfred reacted the way an android would to that kind of situation.  He's not a real boy yet and this chapter awesomely demonstrated that.  Tell me again, Brenda, why aren't I paying for your stories?