Cara Nightingale had made the same mistake twice. Could she recover from past mistakes and get her life in order?
Wow, another update. I was slow to realise. Merci. Also, don't worry about your grammar, it is fine. I too have issues, even though English is my mother tongue, albeit I don't use it regularly since I live in an European city since 25yrs!. It's urban American english that I have a problem with, when it's misused and I suspect because the author can't write standard English.
Love this chpt. especially the parents. Very believable. Protective, simple and direct. Exactly how I picture small town people and islanders. As well, don't let Stephan forgive Cara too easily, although I understand her (a tad) it'd be nice if she has to work for Stephan's love.
Well done. On to the next chpt.
Bajan aka foosrule
Reviewer: foosrule Signed
Ooooooooooo, you're painting Cara to be a right ASS!. Don't much care for her assumptions, projections and immaturity. Hope as you continue she'll mature and grow, otherwise I can see myself getting bored with the same ole Spiel of insecure black woman who projects all on others because (insert a given insecurity).
Good job at the end with the parents. They are right characters and you're doing really good with your portrayal of them.
On to next chpt.............
Cara's problem is not so much insecurity about being black as it is about adapting to change. She has lived a very sheltered life. Yes, she will grow and Stephan will help. Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed Wow!. Where are you going with this??????. Even thoug I suspected the parents were no racists, that they see things differently than Cara's parents is sooooo intriguing. MORE, please!
As well, I'm not quite understanding your alluding to Cara being simple in the last chpt by her father, and now explaining it as being raised in a small town hence the naivety. Which is it?. As simple for me implies handicap, while naive means not having been exposed to so called worldly experiences.
Cara is not handicapped. Have you ever met a person that while they were "normal" something was a little "off". They aren't handicapped per se, they just don't process things are quickly as the normal person. Even though they may be adults, they are a bit 'childlike'.
Cara cant deal with a lot of change. She has to be eased into it. Some people have panic attacks or shut down, but Cara runs away from frightening and difficult situations. She wanted her degree and she had a full scholarship. The big city of NY was scary to her so she went from school to work. She didn't venture out because she didn't think she could handle it. This was her way of coping with being in a strange environment.
Stephan was within her comfort zone. He was at the hotel where she worked. She was frightened of him at first, but as she got used to being around him by having to fix his breakfast, she realized that she was attracted to him, and the rest...well you know the rest. LOL
I guess Cara reminds me of my sister who is a normal person, married and has a family. However, my sister cant handle stressful situations at all. She'd fall apart and is that way even now. When things happen she calls me, even now and I talk her through them and then she gets alright. I don't know how better to explain Cara, but most people know of someone like this.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed
What's a girl to do, when she doesn't listen to her head but instead throws caution to the wind for one night?
We've all had an encounter with that guy, right? The one who knows that he is sex on two legs. That guy who you know should be avoided, but still manages to reel you in easily. That guy who is still in your bed, even though he is long gone.
No? You don't know him. Well, Ambi does.
I like Ambi's "crazy thoughts". Very humourous. It keeps this story in perspective for me. Also, I'm not a big fan of urban speak (I know I complain about it often, in other stories, but it's mostly because it just doesn't fit the premises some authors present), but yours is fitting and you use it more so when the friends get together. Much more realistic and that way I enjoy the banter more. Well done. Will continue to read and leave my thoughts.
thanks for reading.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed Terri Lawson, a middle-aged modeling agent had one job to do: find someone totally different then what the agency usually picks. When she runs into a young man way out of anything she'd ever consider...both of their lives change for the better.
Since when is "pushing 40yrs" considered a cougar?. I've always assumed it's from mid-forties?. Or is this only in the US?.
Hey, over here in the states a woman is considered a cougar when she dates/or enjoys have sex with men in over 8 years younger than them...
according to wikipedia (i know, such an unreliable source):
the term refers to women over 30-40 years old who pursue sexual relations with people more than eight years younger
in this case, terri is around 38-39 years old. daniel is 22. so she's got him by 16-17 years. i'd say the woman's definitely a cougar lol
Reviewer: foosrule Signed Thanks for the explanation, re cougars. Somehow I thought it referred more to the age of the woman, than the age difference between her and the man?. Totally not updated with this jargon.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed
At some point, you'll have to eventually let your guard down.
God forbid you be an ugly girl, 'course too pretty is also your doom, 'cause everyone harbors a secret hatred for the prettiest girl in the room.
Ani Difranco
Well written. Not preachy, which I was kind of dreading. As well I like the celebrity you casted as Jameson snr. He's one of the few I can picture in such a setting. Good choice!!!!.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed I just read your notes and couldn't agree more, ESPECIALLY about the dark skinned black women, but would also appreciate reading about slim women as well. Am also very tired of seeing pics of celebrities representing the characters as they tend to distract me from really getting into the story, BECAUSE, most of them are not sympathetic (those female rap or reality stars. YUCK!). So I appreciate you giving me the opportunity to voice my opinion on this as well. Am off to read and will leave a review.
Reviewer: foosrule Signed Madison DuMont, English by birth but raised in New York, has returned to England to pursue her dream of being a top ballerina with her best friend and fellow dancer, Dante Palmer. After encountering the same racial issues with being a black ballerina in a predominantly white field she experienced in NY, Madison invests her inheritance in opening her own ballet company. A chance meeting with Matthew Bradley one night leads her down an unexpected path where she battles her personal perceptions of interracial relationships and whether they are worth it.
Nooooooooooooooo!. Wot an ending!!!!! I was thinking: so what, she's higher than a kite, but then, had to take into consideration her stuff shirt boyfriend and his friends. Aristocrats, uppercrust Brits FROWN hugely on such (public) behaviour. Can't wait to see how Matt deals with seeing his "poppet" so low. She did warn him though.....lol!. Totally loving this drama. It's so differently done.
Update sooner, please!
Reviewer: foosrule Signed What an update!. Thank you.
You know, I was worried that you're dragging out this premise, but my goodness, how talented are thee to have captivated me, again, the last three chapters with drama, humour, passion, family, friends, new people, that ingenious auction, setting it up so that Madison does one of her hilarious, spontaneous outbursts, endearing her even more to the audience. I pictured it so vividly. Love the scene with Grumps and agree with those who think he's more than cunning and actually might have (or will develop) a soft spot for Maddie. She's so not afraid or in awe of him. Spunky and quirky. My kinda gal!
Dig all the characters, actually. I'm really liking too how you're writing Nathan and Joana. You're really painting an excellent picture of the upper crusts' way of dealing with situations they may not agree with.
Update soon.
Cheers
Reviewer: foosrule Signed Are you KIDDING me?!: Bored!. Lady, STOP fishing for more compliments! ;-)
NOW, I'm beginning to decipher why I ADORE this story or at least am able to express more poignantly why. It's really how you're writing our (black) heroine. So many write "our" heroines as angst filled continuously, even to the end, but you're painting a picture of Madison as grey, pink, orange, yellow, green. She's so colourful in her experiences and especially feelings that I empathise even more and see myself as her, although (whispering now....) I'm ways more than double her age. DON'T JUDGE ME, YOUNG LADIES!!!.
I, as a reader, read her and slowly, her race is not the forefront, but all the other factors that make and remind her she's a FEMALE. (Does that make sense to anyone?).
Brilliant job. I'm keeping my eye on you. Don't disappoint. Keep ON!
Cheers
Thanks for your great review! And I hope others too can see that Madi is a multi-faceted being :)
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