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Summary:

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* NOW ON THE CHAMBER'S TOP TEN MOST FAVORITE STORIES LIST *

When the lines are drawn, will you risk your life to cross them for love?

In the Summer of 1988, tragedy hits home for Charlene Jacobson and her father when her little brother is killed playing a game of basketball in their Detroit housing projects.  She soon finds herself living in the small rural town of Millersville, Georgia, with her estranged grandmother. Millersville is a place where time stands still and the racial divide is as prevalent as the 1950s.  Secrets, lies, and betrayal lurk in every corner. Yet, through it all she finds solace in the arms of Ryan Quinn, a white senior track star and the son of the town Sherriff.  

Will their love cross the finish line?  Please R&R. 

© All right reserved by Rachelle Patterson aka wisedec4u
Do not copy, publish, revise or distribute without the expressed written consent of the above author.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: Deep, dark, and mysterious
Series: None
Chapters: 25
Completed:No
Word count: 103732
Read Count: 153683
Published: November 07 2010
Updated: January 09 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Cast of Characters

I am soooo ready for the family dinners, can't wait.  The characters are very relatable as they are young and attempting to walk a path few have travelled.  Would love to see Ryan's reaction if Mom doesn't approve vs Dad.  We all know how he feels about Dad's opinion right now.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 18 2013

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You have had life mapped out at a young age. Get into a performance arts college. Own your own dance studio and stay away from boys.... But what happens when you meet the love of your life?  Then come to find out he has a girlfriend? But, he has eyes for only you...

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 30
Completed:No
Word count: 181242
Read Count: 78592
Published: April 05 2011
Updated: December 24 2017


Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 THat Part 1

This is definitely a time I am disappointed in Justin.  The girl is already emotional over Delilah and this is how he responds.  He needs some help.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing :) 

Hmm we will just have to see what happens lol

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Date: January 12 2017

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[Reviews - 206]
Summary:

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Shenai always wanted to be with Jeremy but with so many obstacles in her way it was impossible. Now that Jeremy’s father has passed away he’s rushed the next girl that best fit his father description to the altar. Shenai sees her window of opportunity with Jeremy quickly boarding up and wants to take the nails off the boards that are going keep her away from Jeremy forever but she doesn’t have the will to do it. Shenai truly believes after Jeremy is married; her life will be over but little does she know it’s only the beginning of chaotic a life and just maybe she might get what she’s always wanted in the beginning.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Taking a short break from this story
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 38343
Read Count: 37058
Published: April 21 2011
Updated: February 02 2014


Title: Chapter 18: Letters

I am sorry, to me it seems like everyone is selfish.  Where is Shenai's dad?  Does she have a positive father figure in her life that would show her what true love actually looks like.  I feel like they are throwing shenai under the bus.  Yeah I slept with her and I love her but I realize I love my wife and my girlfriend.  What!  Regardless of whatever it is, she comes across as the slut, homewreecker, seducer vs seduced.  Jeremiah knew of her feelings and slept with her knowing she slept with his brother because of his so called "love" for her and at a low point, then Jeremy slept with her knowing full well he was still going to get married and have her stand there front row for IT!  Neither one of them actually cared about her.  They cared about their needs and not hers and now she is pregnant and don't know which is the father with a nasty label.  Aren't they nasty as well.  I wish she would have never met them sometimes.

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Date: October 15 2013

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Summary:

Six months after being attacked, Grace moved to Paris with her boyfriend, Henri. Once there, she must overcome adjusting to French life, working with her crazy new boss, and move on with her life. Henri is trying to find the right time to propose to Grace, but will her pride and his family get the better of her?

 

Sequel to Floraison d'Amour (Blossoming Love)



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 50
Completed:Yes
Word count: 90875
Read Count: 32659
Published: May 25 2011
Updated: September 15 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

I think it would be interesting if Julien fell for her cousin Stacy.  Can't wait for the families to meet.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: October 30 2013

Rated: Teen or Above
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Summary:

Daizan has spent most of her life with a chip on her sholder and a dream that she will not be swayed from. Akiyo has spent the last few years escaping his family obligations through travel and attempting to find himself. She hated him immmediatly, he had no morals.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Family, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Racism, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 14220
Read Count: 5821
Published: July 17 2011
Updated: November 17 2014


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

What is up with Dominick?  Will he be competition for Akiyo.  I am trying to figure out who Akiyo doesn't want to remember.  Akiyo, your father can't respect you as a man unless you cut the strings and stand on your own two feet.  Silly rebellions won't work.

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Date: November 19 2014

Rated: Mature Content
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Summary:

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Having chosen modeling over ministry, Jeremy Ferguson had often felt his father's scorn and disapproval.  Now he was coming home to visit and bringing the love of his life, Aura Vanderleigh who happens to be black.  Growing up in South Carolina, Jeremy knows what his father's reaction will be even if he is a minister!

 

The Preacher's Son is an original work of fiction. Please do not copy or post this story to any other websites. Copyright 2009 BRAnderson

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Racism
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2681
Read Count: 107214
Published: July 31 2011
Updated: June 02 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Facing Family

Went to go purchase the book because I loved this story and your other ones but I didn't see it avail in Ebooks format.  Is that not ready yet?  Ebooks keeps the kids away from my stories.  Can't wait to read again with the editing.



Author's Response:

I was told that it will take about 10 days before the Ibook is read for sale, something about formatting or whatever.  So it is coming and thanks again for all your support!

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: December 08 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 65]
Summary:

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Shy loner white nerd developes caring and complex relationship with popular black girl at school.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 13
Completed:No
Word count: 40411
Read Count: 24467
Published: August 02 2011
Updated: April 02 2017


Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Ummm, *clears throat*, do we have a plan B pill or something because there was no condom involved and she is just starting her career.  Think they need some more time before babies pop up and everything.  

Thanks for the update.  

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Date: April 03 2017

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Summary:

Welcome to the city of Baltimore, MD and into the life of Devyn McKnight. Jewelry designer and entrepreneur, Devyn McKnight, thought she was secure in the shell she built around her life, made of family, friends and her jewelry business but an unexpected encounter challenges all that she is and all that she believes she wants to be.  

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content
Series: Journey
Chapters: 32
Completed:Yes
Word count: 91963
Read Count: 100941
Published: December 11 2011
Updated: January 07 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

Woohoo!  Loved this book.  The characters felt real to me.  I will read again and again.  Can't wait for the next story in this series.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 07 2014

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Summary:

Lieutenant Brady Sloane was a good man, but always seemed to finish last with women, until now.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Challenges: Love Is Blind
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 16076
Read Count: 23745
Published: March 03 2012
Updated: May 06 2016


Title: Chapter 4: Four

My goodness, Harvey, someone needs to dig up dirt on him.  He has been paying off how many women and these women, why haven't they not gotten paid and made this man pay.  This is obvious par for the course and he believes her father is going to be "happy" to have his darling daughter with scum like him.  Puhleese.  He doesn't know that Pen is smarter than what he gives her credit for and she is aware of the snake he is which is why she doesn't want to date him.  Lucas is right there along with Harvey if he even makes one attempt to besmirch Brady's name.  This man has already been thru enough and you want to make it worse like a spoiled brat.  I hope her mom and dad come in and whoop Harvey's ass like they Aunt Viv and Philip from the old Prince of Bel Air.  Don't let Pen fall for the okie doke and don't let our boy Brady go down because of this mitch.

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Date: May 07 2016

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[Reviews - 563]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 89808
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014


Title: Chapter 17: I just want you to be happy Adam.

Crying while smiling.  It is over but yet it is just the beginning for these two.  They have absolutely taken me on an emotional rollercoaster but it was fabulous and would get on it with them again "wink,wink".  You have 2 books now completed on here and I have to say I am so appreciative you have shared your talent with us on this site.  Can't wait to read more from you.



Author's Response:

You're right it is just the beginning for Adam and Shaun.  There are soooo many directions they could go together it's crazy.  Thank you for reading!

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Date: May 17 2014

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William Lucas Kapori was a self-made millionaire. At 40 he had everything he ever wanted, a beautiful twenty something girlfriend, a luxurious mansion, and a job that he loved. His life was perfect, so why was he pursuing Ana Kay.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 13
Completed:No
Word count: 52745
Read Count: 75711
Published: March 29 2012
Updated: April 10 2014


Title: Chapter 10: {Ten}

Epic beatdown, yes.  That is exactly what Frederick needed, to realize how helpless he made all of those women feel.  Monica needs to go sit her a** down somewhere. Nth is is more for her than for Ana.  If she was thinking about Ana, she will not even attempt to see her.  And I have to ask,  will we be seeing any romantic interests with El and Nathan.  Fingers crossed, sad face if you don't :(

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Date: October 24 2013

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Summary:

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Loving a man is hard enough try loving the devil?

 

How do you love a man that doesn't want to be love?

 

How can you care for a person who could careless about you?

 

How do you try to find a soul mate from a soulless man?

 

Jacqueline finds herself sold to devil she try's to unfreeze a heart that seems untouchable.

 

The harder she try's to love him the more lost she gets into the battle of loving the devil.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:No
Word count: 58549
Read Count: 87198
Published: September 24 2012
Updated: March 31 2016


Title: Chapter 16: 99 Problems

What did he expect?  He didn't exactly DTR.  I mean she is there not of her own free will.  He didn't court her or take her out on dates.  How does she know what he does with his girlfriend and the FACT he HAS a girlfriend automatically puts her in the role of mistress and whore.  He isn't taking her to fancy restaurants like Roxanne so WHY does he think she should feel differently?  James needs to sit down and use his analytical thinking mind versus his emotions to truly see what position she is in.  Heck, she can't go anywhere by herself.  She is locked up in his house daily with no interaction except him (her captor), Ace (her captors friend) and a phone call with her cousin Mo.  He doesn't tell her he picked all of this out by himself etc.  She isn't a mind reader James.  Also she isn't like Roxanne and Katherine, trinkets, jewelry doesn't provide her with security or peace.  She felt closer to him when he shared something with her that was personal than material items.  

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Date: April 01 2016

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Jayden made the biggest mistake of his life when he let the love of his life slip through his fingers.  Could he make it right and start anew?  Tamaeya had been burned by Jayden once and had no intentions of being burnt a second time, but it seemed that the heart had it's own mind.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 4965
Read Count: 107796
Published: February 06 2013
Updated: April 19 2017


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 In The Beginning

You have come back with a great chapter.  Nancy needs closure about her life.  That is the only way she will begin to truly heal.  She can't get passed being left like Trash and that is why she is soo much for mingling with the uppercrest.  Part of me wonders if she loves her husband for who he is or what he had.  Dana is wonderful and Tam needs to accept the gift  she has and plan on how to prevent it from ruling her life as a little girl.  I hope in future chapters Tam actually becomes more of the loving individual we saw in the beginning and less of a bitter woman.  I see it slowly happening.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 08 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 82]
Summary:

It is a tedious thing...to love someone with every molecule of your being, yet keep them blissfully unaware. How long before the act begins to fray at the seams?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Crackfic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2189
Read Count: 11268
Published: March 21 2013
Updated: June 03 2015


Title: Platonic Facade

Okay, I am confused by their feelings.  Do they have a romantic interest at all with each other or is it platonic.  Iris can get the boot because she will destroy the relationship anyway and if a man, your man who you are sexing on the regular doesn't put you first you need to leave.  5 yrs, hell naw!!  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 13 2014

Title: Platonic Facade

Iris is exactly what I hate about some women.  YOU can only AFFECT YOU.  If you know you are developing feelings and he isn't, YOU have to make the best decision for YOUR well-being.  It might hurt in the short term but you will be better off in the long term.  You might be missing your blessing dealing with his mess.  STOP going to the other girl trying to fight.  It was SYDNEY screwing you over.  SYDNEY told her he wasn't with you when she called.  Jonah wasn't aware that you were lying next to him.  It was SYDNEY that left the sweatshirt at her house, how da hell she suppose to know you brought it.  If that ain't a red flag telling you where you fall on his ladder of importance, I don't know what is.  I mean is the "D" really that good that you have lost your ever lovin' mind.  Now Jonah better speak up to Syd about what went down and inform him she doesn't appreciate this mess.  I wonder how Iris is going to try and reverse this back on Jonah as the reason for her fighting her etc.  Right now, Syd needs to drop Iris completely, no sexing her or anything b/c she seems like the girl that will hold onto any crumb and expand it to a loaf of bread when ain't nothing there but a crumb and it's crusty at that. 

Looking forwards to your next update.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: June 04 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 93]
Summary:

 

 

 

Professor Wilson is in the office late again grading papers. I wonder who'll stop by...



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 19538
Read Count: 18141
Published: March 25 2013
Updated: November 24 2013


Title: Chapter 5: In the Woods

His dad is Shadyyy.  He doesn't care about his son but more about bragging rights and business.  Also even Jeremiah, why would you agree to this if you love your daughter so much, did she come to you about doing this and I'm sorry Sarah, c'mon where is the pride at.  If a man don't want you and it is only a business transaction, why.  You deserve love just as much as anyone.  I hope Pierce is prepared for the utter destruction of your private life by your father.  Why don't I see a happy ending in this.  When you read about the characters, their ages fly out the window for me.  I honestly  forget sometime that he is as young as he is since he does not hesistate to ask for what he wants for the most part and the confidence.  Hey, Prince Maxillmillian o Liechenstein married an older black woman.  Why can't Pierce.  Thanks for coming back with a good chapter.



Author's Response:

Haha you make some excellent points. So good that I think in the next chapter I will include some insight regarding Jeremiah's choice to marry off his beloved daughter in such a manner. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: November 26 2013

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Summary:

“A mighty pain to love it is,
And 'tis a pain that pain to miss;
But of all pains, the greatest pain
It is to love, but love in vain.”



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 24611
Read Count: 9160
Published: April 01 2013
Updated: March 02 2014


Title: Chapter 7: Instant Gratification

I feel so bad for Charley.  Rider can't even make it for her birthday when she has been there for all of his events, birthdays and invitations and he can't show up on her birthday.  Then goad her into pretty much putting her feelings on the table with nothing from him but physical at this time.  I am guessing you are close to merging the past with the future since she is I am guessing pregnant after this interlude.  No condoms were worn.  They both are emotionally a wreck and can't simply speak about their feelings.  Rider with his constant mixed signals would be a headache for me and I would have to cut him out of my life because of that.  As long as she is holding out for him, she won't find anyone else and unfortunately this has sealed him upon her heart.  Wonder how Rider felt during this.

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Date: March 02 2014

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She was his best kept secret, his most treasured possession, an exotic African-American beauty that won his heart from the very beginning. But keeping what he did for a living a secret from her and trying to keep her a secret from his enemies was proving to be the hardest job he'd ever had as an assassin. 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 17
Completed:No
Word count: 63805
Read Count: 101219
Published: April 02 2013
Updated: June 12 2014


Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - The Trigger

I don't know if it was just me but I had tears in my eyes laughing at that whole chapter from Elliot to Rex to Ebony straight handing them their asses at the end.  Dominic panicking was on point.  Trained killers brought down by lil ole Ebony.  Thanks for that update.  Whew that was good.  Now we have to see how she will reconcile this part of her personality with her previous one.  Still have a smile on my face.

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Date: August 13 2013

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[Reviews - 209]
Summary:

Loki

What happens after Loki falls from the Rainbow Bridge? My first fic EVER. M rating for later chapters.



Table of Contents
Categories: Movies, Original Fiction
Characters: Other
Classification: Alternate Universe, Off Cannon , Supernatural
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 22
Completed:No
Word count: 49769
Read Count: 39819
Published: April 13 2013
Updated: April 22 2014


Title: Chapter 21: Medicine

Ahahaha, Loki was high, high, high, high.  Had the munchies.  Uh oh, looking like Anna caught feelings despite what she said.  In all honesty, I dont't want Anna with Danny.  I feel like she could do better.  She doesn't come first to him and I am not sure she would.  I am so in love with Loki and Noni.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 15 2014

Title: Chapter 1: Not Quite Dead

Sorry to hear about your grandmother.  We appreciate that you have been able to provide us with a chapter to read and entertain ourselves with.  Take the time you need to heal & adjust (which is sometimes the biggest challenge of them all when we lose a close love one) and we will be here waiting whenever you're ready.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 05 2013

Title: Chapter 1: Not Quite Dead

Sorry to hear about your grandmother.  We appreciate that you have been able to provide us with a chapter to read and entertain ourselves with.  Take the time you need to heal & adjust (which is sometimes the biggest challenge of them all when we lose a close love one) and we will be here waiting whenever you're ready.

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Date: October 05 2013

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Summary:

At some point, you'll have to eventually let your guard down.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 31
Completed:No
Word count: 192818
Read Count: 216597
Published: May 08 2013
Updated: October 03 2015


Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 18 pt 3

First off, I have to say you write some of the best love/sex scenes I have ever read.  Kudos to you because that is such a talent.  The scenes do not detract from the story or wonder why the hell is this here.

Now on to Henry and Val.  Please let Val stay strong and take those feelings and thoughts she had throughout this day to forge ahead in her own life.  

Henry, what the hell happened.  You almost slipped and said the I LOVE YOU phrase a couple of times to disappear like invisible ink the moment the day is up.  Seriously you couldn't text back a Hello, is it me your looking for( in a Lionel Richie voice).  

When he returns, she needs to let him sweat it out.  I understand he has issues but you dragged her into them versus letting her be at the club and going your separate ways.  Can't get a sister all hot and bothered on multiple occasions.  HE knew SHE had emotional baggage from the get go.  

I am dying for your next updates and see what he has to say for himself.  He wasn't seen with any female during those 4 weeks, was he.  Specifically someone Pat tried to hook him up with recently.  

FYI, you know I read this last chapter like 3 times. Time for some cold water, I'm feeling a little parched.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 24 2014

Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 19

Holy cannoli, wow, what a great chapter.  Back with a bang.  God, Henry is so broken that the sad part is Valerie is more together than him.  Never thought I would type that. He laid his feelings bare during this.  Chase had him coming out of his clothes like the Hulk ready to whoop that ass for touching Val.  Ahh Henry you need counseling too.  Maybe Val can give you her counselor so number.  How they are going to make it, I have no idea but can't wait to get back on this rollercoaster.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 15 2014

Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 18

Why do I think that she see's Henry and model chick Rhea either doing something and detoured to the bathroom.  I am hoping you don't write her doing some self harm behavior or at least talking herself out of doing some sort of self harm.  I didn't like how all of a sudden he see's this model and he kind of forgets val for a moment..  Also where he has at some point separated from her and friends and was talking to old girl.  Why do I have a feeling Rhea is going to cause issues.  Don't like Pat, why would you tell a stranger who Henry  is with about another woman being perfect for him.  I just have a feeling Val is going to have a coming of age moment with Henry, Pat and Rhea.  Don't let him screw up  too bad, he had me floored when he named the kittens apples and peaches.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 12 2014

Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Henry sometimes seems too perfect.  I feel like he has a huge secret, even more than sleeping with the married woman.  I feel like he has dated gorgeous, shallow girls that he knows won't care to a degree and Val is obviously someone who care a great deal.  She is really the antithesis of his recent relationships.  Every time they are out, I notice he always asks her if she is okay with his lifestyle and taking pics etc with fans.  Is ther a specific reason for this?  Things that make me go hmmm.  But overall if they don't get a HEA because I have never seen two people who complement each so well as them. And can I just say, LAWD can I have a Henry?  Do you have a website that we can place an order.  C'mon now, I'm serious. ;)

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: December 31 2013

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