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Summary:

Farewell

 

She didn't choose this Life. He chose It for her. And for that, he must pay the Ultimate Price.

Exceedingly Dope Banner by my homeskillet Valhalla.



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Horror, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 32
Completed:No
Word count: 92749
Read Count: 98285
Published: January 24 2011
Updated: March 20 2014


Title: Chapter 30: Kyōshi

I don't know if your writing this story anymore but I'm so team Vlad, I miss them and hope if you do update that you write something with the both of them. I feel like Bowie is powerful and he is the only dude in this story that is on her level. They would make an amazing team, especially with all the people coming after her. I like her friendship with Reid though wish they would keep it that way.

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Date: September 09 2013

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[Reviews - 231]
Summary:

make it nasty

 

Emery Johnson has been crushing on her older brothers best friend for years, too bad in his eyes, she will only ever be recognized as 'Darrell's sister'. Ready to change that, Emery enlists the help of a single book to snare her dream man, but along the way someone else steps into the picture, shaking up the feelings that Emery thought were tightly secured and forever stable.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 116446
Read Count: 82518
Published: June 08 2012
Updated: September 08 2013


Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

It took me a couple days to read this story and all I can think is its been 18 chapters and Emrey and Logan are still not together. Why? I can't tell you how disappointed I felt when i read chapter 18 and it said 4 years later. Seriously it's like torture with these characters, their wasting so much friggen time and letting outside influence ruin something that can be a genuine true love. I'm so pissed that Darrell her flipping twin would be so selfish and ruin his sister's happiness. He's a bad brother and even worse friend, who puts conditions on a friendship like that? So just because he was miserable everyone else had to be too, what a jackass. I'm really into this story but I feel like it's a disservice that we the readers are not getting or going to see these perfect people for each other in a relationship. It makes me sad &'pouty and all I can hope is that you update soon with some better progress of Emery and Logan being together. Please I'm DYING here!!!

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Date: November 24 2014

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Summary:

Matt was the love them and leave them type till he met Azalea. She turned the tables on him but not for the reasons he thinks. Will he forgive her when he learns the truth?



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:No
Word count: 45561
Read Count: 64336
Published: August 25 2012
Updated: June 02 2014


Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

Omg please you have to update. I HAVE to read this confrontation, too excited to see what happens next.

Reviewer: RAPTUSMIND Signed
Date: November 03 2013

Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

Hot damn.....

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Date: November 10 2013

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[Reviews - 592]
Summary:

At some point, you'll have to eventually let your guard down.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 31
Completed:No
Word count: 192818
Read Count: 217378
Published: May 08 2013
Updated: October 03 2015


Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 PREVIEW

This is one of the best stories I ever read. Honey... That sex scene gave me chills. Seriously I have officially replaced Christiano Ronaldo in my fantasies with Henry Walker. He's a mother f-ing sex god. You have made me fall in love with him. Now ya girl Val makes me wanna smack he sometimes, she needs to realize that she deserves this...that she deserves him. I'm so happy for the both of them, finding someone that stimulates your mind and you sexually is rare. I hope it's all roses for them here on out. Awesome story and I will definitely be looking out for this completed chapter...amazing.

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Date: December 16 2013

Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 23

OMG this chapter was so good. Henry man, every time he says those 3 little words my stomach drops. I want these two together so frigging bad. Please update as fast as you can because I'm dying to read more. This story is such a great gift for the holidays.

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Date: December 25 2014

Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 19

Man...I guess I'm like those stereotypical girls in those romantic movies because I would of jumped in Henry's arms when he said he was in love with me lmao, sorry....not sorry. Val is truly traumatized by her last relationship because her being scared of Henry was kinda weird. I would understand if she feared for Chase, who btw is a dick, but being scared of Henry was actually sad. I don't want her to fear him ever because I really do like them together. If I was Valerie  though I would of gave him the business. How he gonna roll up months later talking about "she is his" and no one should touch her. I would of asked him if he was out of his ever loving mind and cussed his ass out. But of course when he professed his love I would of got down and dirty with him that same night. Hopefully he can convince val to be with him again so she will do the same thing lol. Now I'm really excited for the next chapter, please update soon.

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Date: April 16 2014

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Summary:

 

Quitting love is never easy; no matter the situation. That saying seems to follow Jake Ryder in the once vibrant form of Sierra Lewis. The cycle doesn't seem to stop, or maybe he just doesn't want it to.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content
Series: Impossible to Kill
Chapters: 13
Completed:Yes
Word count: 43800
Read Count: 19524
Published: June 08 2013
Updated: May 27 2014


Title: Chapter 11: The Need to Know.

I'm sorry but Finch & Definitely Monica is the ones to blame in this situation. They act like they weren't around for the whole saga of the Jake & Sierra relationship. It's obvious they have unfinished business and love still lingeres there. Hell, Monica new this much because she wouldn't of confronted Sierra to stay away if there wasn't something there. Monica brought this whole thing on herself, I can't stand those "wait around" chicks. It's pathetic IMO, you can't just stick around and hope one day this dude will love you... especially when he loved another person so much that not even her being on drugs and cheating stopped him from being with her. Monica was blinded by her own wants even though the truth was staring dead in her face

And Finch has no concept of Guy Code, no matter what went down he should of had his boys back, and if he wanted Monica, all he had to do was tell jake and I'm sure he wouldn't of started shit with her. He saw this whole thing coming, I don't get why he was so pissed. Finch is a bad friend, he puts Jake down practically every time he see's him, calls the person he loves horrible names, and now backstabb's him. Friends don't do that, no matter how frustrating your friend's decisions are you never throw it back in their face. You can tell them your opinion but never ever force it upon them because at the end of the day it's their own decision to make. The test is how loyal can you be after that desicion. For me there is no love lost in that friendship. 

Also does anyone get that being on drugs is a disease. Yes at first it's a choice but there comes a point were it gets so bad that it's a disease that is extremely hard to get rid of. That's why I wasn't shocked when Sierra bought drugs and almost relapse. I was very glad she didn't but it was understandable why she did it. I just hate that Jake's "closest" friends keep calling her a crack whore when they don't know shit about her disease or what she's been through. 

Maksim seems really interesting to me. I would love to learn more about him and neema's relationship. I don't know if they have a thing going on but I kind of want them to. There is just something about Maksim. 

Now for Sierra, the girl is all kinds of screwed up but for some reason I'm rooting for her. I want all of her hopes and dreams to come true. I want her to get her revenge, I want her to get her man back, and I want her to beat her addiction. I think your doing a great job writing her, because someone I should hate is actually someone I really care for. Only a great writer can get you to sympathize with such a screwed up character lol. I want her and Jake to have their happy ending but her buying a gun to kill viktor doesn't seem like such good path for it. Can I hope for her kill him and no one ever find out lol. This story is really really good, I can't wait for your next update. 

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Date: March 08 2014

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Summary:

Formally Ashes, Ashes

Red flashing lights…

Heavy footsteps echoed through the deserted hallway.

Fire alarms blared...

Breaths lodged in throats as the search for survival worsened.

Pungent smell of death overwhelmed as the Z’s closed in...

Survival was futile now, running was the only escape; in this new apocalyptic post war world, living was no longer guaranteed.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Horror
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content
Challenges: Chamber Grindhouse Challenge 6
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 65447
Read Count: 38145
Published: October 12 2013
Updated: June 05 2014


Title: Chapter 18: Fallen

Wow...amazing! I loved ever minute of this book and can't wait for the next installment. What a cliff hanger, all I can hope is that Micheal in not dead. I want him and Celeste to be together so bad. Awesome writing and I love your characters.

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Date: June 05 2014

Title: Chapter 10: Karen's 11

Omg yay they kissed. Please please please update, I friggen love this story.

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Date: December 04 2013

Title: Chapter 6: M9 Beretta

OMG I can't believe jasper is dead.... I liked him and celeste's dynamic. He was an ass to her but I think he was that way because he cared about her and didn't want to see her die. He's one of those guys that would say I will kick your ass if you die on me and guess what he dies on her. I'm so sad, and I'm hoping Micheal and Celeste don't die either, I also like him and his creepy I barely know you but want you attitude towards Celeste. I want a chance to see how they work as a couple, micheal is such a rugged man and I find him so so hot. I have to say your writing of the Z's are masterful, I feel like I'm right there watching the whole scene play out. Great job, I can't wait for more.

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Date: November 10 2013

Title: Chapter 14: Two Days

Wow, I have know idea what's going on. I am glad that Micheal's okay, but I think it's obvious that he is not trying to rescue jasper. Celeste needs to let it go, that boy is a lost cause, he has the fucking virus. Omg and now she has cravings for blood. Great I hope it's the baby and not her. I would of went bat shit crazy if I were in her position, probably broke the mirror in the bathroom and cut any bitch that walked through the door. Damn this story just keeps getting better and better. I can't wait to find out who micheal really is. Kinda hoping it's his baby now even though it's a fucking little zombie. 

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Date: March 09 2014

Title: Chapter 13: Phase II

Ok 1 who's the father? I'm thinking jasper...maybe. 2 Karen is one crazy bitch, Celeste needs to fuck her up. I agree with her about burning down the place and I hope she succeeds. This story is so well written. I wish there was more in each chapter because it's so good. I hope you update really soon. I'm dying to know what happened to micheal, I'm 100% for him and Celeste. 

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Date: March 02 2014

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Summary:

She was only a debt to him... or so she thought.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 17
Completed:No
Word count: 26251
Read Count: 77593
Published: February 23 2014
Updated: July 08 2015


Title: Chapter 7: Seven

She sucks, she's in so much trouble now lol.

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Date: November 30 2014

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Summary:

How far will you go when you're lonely?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 75
Completed:No
Word count: 151713
Read Count: 139625
Published: March 13 2014
Updated: July 17 2015


Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

Why does Steve have to be so Hot!!! He's so damn exciting and I can't help but love a dominant man. I hope she does meet up with him, and hopefully he's telling the truth about Craig. Ok so Jodi's boss is out of his mind; It is completely unprofessional to accuse Jodi of sleeping with his son, I know somehow that's sexual harassment. And if I were Jodi I would be looking for a knew job pronto after that asshole basically said he would be watching her like a hawk. No one should ever be that uncomfortable in their career, what a dick. Nice chap UD soon.



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Thanks for the review, Raptusmind!

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Date: May 31 2014

Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Uhhh....I don't know. I feel like Jodi jumping from guy to guy is blah. It's like every guy she's with is just not genuine. Seriously her crying over this Craig guy was strange, girl it was just one evening with him and she caught feelings that quick & hard. Girly got really deep and rooted issues, I hope she gets help. 

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Date: April 23 2014

Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Oh no, I do not like that. I'm totally Team Steve, so her saying that she is his whore is not good. I feel like she's saying that she is in the same situation with Steve like she was with her rapist...ah no! From what I read everything with Steve was VERY consensual and VERY enjoyable. Jody needs to get it together, and keep the guys at a minimum. I like Matt but he's Steve's brother so she should drop him. And Craig?!

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Date: April 22 2014

Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Lol, I love them. With Steve and Jodi everything is so light. There is just this push and pull you get from them that is so enjoyable to read. I have to say Jodi is less annoying when around him. Excited for more update soon.

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Date: April 30 2014

Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

I'm trying to figure out why Jodi has so much attitude with Steve? What exactly did he do? From what I remember it was her who let him in her house and almost fucked him with barely knowing him for 2 seconds. She then almost fucks him in her office and he succeeds getting the ass at her place. And didn't she just say just thinking about him makes her wet. Now he's the worst thing in the world. Ok Jodi...I see you. Sorry but I really don't care about Craig..he's boring and Jodi with this whole "connection" with him is not convincing but whatev.



Author's Response:

Jodi is still angry with Steve because he called her demanding to know if Matt was still at her house the night before he left for St Louis.

Reviewer: RAPTUSMIND Signed starstar
Date: April 28 2014

Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Short and Sweet your right! So, I was glad Jodi apologized, but I was definitely scared for her when Matt called her out lol. Like damn he put it all out there unlike some dudes who would of played it off like it didn't matter. Truly I was shocked but happy once he let it go.

Any who, Jodi's self talk there was a little disturbing, I mean this girl puts a new meaning to self loathing. IMO I find nothing wrong with exploring your sexuality but she's doing it in a way of self punishment. Obviously therapy never worked for her because if it did then she wouldn't be this screwed up. I can't believe she thinks what that ass did to her was her fault. And for her to go around trying to spread it for any guy who shows her a little attention as a result is just bad. I think she should forget about that Craig guy, keep Matt as a friend, and see where things go with Steve. 

I really hope you do write another chapter today because I'm so ready for Steve to return, I miss him. I want him to come back and get Jodi to put her walls down because I really do believe they can have something special. Steve is not a bad guy, I think it was really sweet when he defended his brother's feelings. I have to admit he's a little obsessive & possessive but the way he wears it is so damn sexy lol. I can't wait for the nex installment.

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Date: April 27 2014

Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

Men....the original Ho's that ain't loyal. Craig finally showed his true colors, and solidified the fact that men are no good piece of shits that you can't trust.

Now I'm never the one to call Jodi a whore, slut, or trick. I'm truly a person who believes in expressing your self sexually, as long a you do it safely. But Jodi IMO deserves those 3 titles and more. I have absolutely NO RESPECT for bitches who step on other women toes. Jodi sat their and got actual facts on how Craig was trying to make it work with the mother of his child and she went into slut mode and threw herself at him. I can't stand tricks like that, there's nothing worse than a women who's selfish enough to say "fuck that girl who probably been in love with this guy for most her life, and fuck that kid who's dying to have their daddy back home, fuck the family they created I'm just gonna throw my pussy in his face because well I want to fuck"......NO U HO.

Jodi is a slut who deserve to be lonely. Girl has been through a hell of a lot but there's a time when you have to grow up and take responsibility for your actions. Craig is NOT SINGLE and Jodi decided to still get involved with him?! She gets what she deserves, because in real life men don't chose the sluts they chose their girl at home. Craig is an ass and Jodi....I guess I no longer care about her journey. 

Your a great writer and I hope to read more of your stuff. The characters in this story though (with the exception of Steve) I can't invest in because truly I don't like them. You have to listen to your audience with of course not compromising your story, and take your characters and make them more likable, or give us those same unlikable characters but make us sympathize with them more. But I get it though...the title explains this story...Jodi is definitely lonely and she's gonna stay that way.



Author's Response:

Raptusmind, thanks for your review! I believe your commnets are on point as well!

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Date: June 01 2014

Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Damnnnnn.....that was hot. Kevin really knows how to put it down, just like Jodi I would of been in his bed 2 months later lol. I was hoping Greg would give her another chance, but IMO that night with Kevin should have her seeing no one else but him. Now only if she could have that with Steve then this story would be perfect. Craig is boring me to tears, like seriously the girl barely flirted with him and he starts blushing like a school girl...No not sexy. Matt is irrelevant to me...sorry.

Can Jodi finally go to therapy so she can stop all this mess and become a grown woman. I need her to start a grown up relationship, hell she is 40. But please don't let her relationship be with Matt or Craig...I don't want to be bored. Anyway, good chapter, it looks like Jodi's past is way more interesting than her present. So please updat with more of her past.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review. I must say that I do get a tad bit more enjoyment when I write about her past. Her life as an older adult can be mundane, but let's see if it sparks up! :)

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Date: May 10 2014

Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Kevin is truly obsessed....but I don't know if that's such a bad thing. I guess it depends on how hot he is lol. He has a huge sexual apatite and seems to be flawless in bed but that means nothing if he can't stimulate Jodi's mind. She was in love with Greg and never slept with him so point proven. 



Author's Response:

Great observation!

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Date: May 17 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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Summary:

Quick Richonne one-shot, taking place soon after Michonne meets up with Rick and Carl in the second half of season four.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television
Characters: Other
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2199
Read Count: 1112
Published: April 02 2014
Updated: April 02 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Broken Pieces

That was so Hot, love me some Rick and Michonne. Awesome one-shot wish there was more.

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Date: April 02 2014

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Summary:

Liam Bates is a 30 year old man who wants nothing more in life than a child. Even if it means raising it by himself.

Clarissa Reeves has a goal she wants to reach in life but the only thing in her way is lack of money.

So what wrong with two people helping each other out with what they want? 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 17
Completed:No
Word count: 51105
Read Count: 64266
Published: April 13 2014
Updated: October 24 2016


Title: Chapter 2: Hi

I like Clarissa too, please update soon I'm dying to see them meet.



Author's Response:

HI RAPTUSMIND! I'm glad you do lol. There's not a bad bone in her body lol. LOL I hope I don't disappoint you if their meeting is boring lol. Thanks for reading and reviewin! :)

Reviewer: RAPTUSMIND Signed starstarstarstar
Date: April 19 2014

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